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Today’s post is a short scene staring one of (many of) your favorite characters and in an effort to satisfy the JusJoJan prompt: “Penultimate” from Judy https://judydykstrabrown.com/ , as well as Teagan  Geneviene’s latest writing exercise. Teagan asks us to: “Write at least a paragraph that has to do with a year 24. For example 1724, 2024, 2324.”

The director called Skippy over to his chair. “Skippy, we have a problem, and you might be the only person who can help us.”

“What kind of problem, Mr. DeVos?”

“In the parlance of the era of this play, you know, nineteen twenty-four, our resident sheik got himself plastered and upchucked in the street. Some John Law nabbed him and he’s under glass for a stretch and won’t be able to go on stage tonight. Do you think you can fill in?”

“And how! I’ve studied his role, Mr. DeVos. I’m sure I could go on for him.”

“Attaboy, but there’s a problem. We added a penultimate scene, you know, just before the climax. Your character meets up with some sheba. She gets him so balled up, he almost misses the train at the start of the final scene. I need you to get into character for that. Do you still think you can do it?”

“Posilutely. I’ll just imagine I’m dancing with Lulu. I’m a pretty good hoofer.”

“Lulu? Who’s Lulu? Ain’t no Lulu in this play. .”

“Lulu’s a flapper from the past. I met her at some ritzi party at some real swanky place. Man I could be her jelly bean.”

“From the past? Are you hopped up? How did you meet some kitten from the past?”

“I swear, I’m not primed or potted. I was at a party, and Lulu strolled in toward the end. I made her a drink, but she wanted to go out and get a cheeseburger. So off we went.”

“Well, you’re a bit of a pushover. What’s this woman like? Maybe we can add something to the character in this scene, so she encourages you.”

“Give her a bloody Mary and a bowl of horseradish to dip the celery in. She loves to do that.”

“That will be easy. The scene takes place in a speakeasy. Put on those glad rags and get a wiggle on. We have a dress rehearsal in ten minutes.”

In addition to the prompt, this post benefited from Teagan’s dictionary of slang from the Roaring Twenties — Speak Flapper, and from her serial story, Hullaba Lulu.

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62 responses to “Swept Away — JusJoJan”

  1. Good morning Dan I really enjoyed that story …I know Skippy is a budding actor and that he has a crush on Lulu… I am impressed that you wove the two prompts together very well done. …I had to smile my mum who was charleston dance champion when she was a young girl 💜💜

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    1. Thanks Willow. That’s cool about your mum, Willow. That was quite the dance. I’m sure Skippy could handle it, but I’d be all over my partner’s feet.

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      1. Lol I am sure he can 💜💜💜

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    2. It would be wonderful to see old photos of that. What a delightful comment, Willow. Hugs.

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      1. Thank you Teagan… My mum was a beauty too and had her own hairdressing salon . She was born in 1910 . I was the last of nine children and she was in her 40s when she had me 💜💜💜💜

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  2. Nice work! As I read this excellent passage, I imagined Skippy looking a lot like Danny Kaye. :o)

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    1. Danny Kaye was always a favorite. Thanks.

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    This is great Dan! I’m glad you are helping Skippy fine-tune his acting skills. I know he’s more than a part-time bartender! Ginger💞

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    1. Skippy has a big dream, Ginger. Despite all his inept attempts at bar tending, he has won the hearts of a loyal fan base.

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  4. I have to admit that was a load of fun, Dan! Strike up the band, I wanna dance!

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    1. I’m glad you enjoyed it, Dale. It was fun to write. Just don’t get zozzled.

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      1. Aww c’mon, Dan. That’s part of the fun!

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        1. Lulu would combine dancing and giggle water, Dale. Come on out and cut a rug. :)

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          1. Woot! I like Lulu! On my way :)

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  5. I’m telling you, Dan, you and Teagan really should think about collaborating.

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    1. Thanks GP. I’m just glad she doesn’t mind me borrowing her character.

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      1. I don’t think I’ve ever seen Teagan upset – Especially with you!

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        1. She’s been vey helpful, GP.

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    2. Dan’s great to work with, GP. Remember all the photos he did for Brother Love? And we did a SyFy-Spaghetti Western sort story, The Inyan Beacon. https://www.amazon.com/Inyan-Beacon-Teagan-R%C3%ADord%C3%A1in-Geneviene-ebook/dp/B0C3Z7G2C6/ref=sr_1_27?crid=225SW6VVXNUXJ&keywords=teagan+geneviene&qid=1704475339&sprefix=teagan+geneviene%2Caps%2C219&sr=8-27
      Thanks for visiting here. Hugs.

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      1. Fantastic!! I will read this soon.

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  6. Jumping Jehoshaphat! Dan you have really turned my year around! This is the nicest thing anybody could have done for me. Thank you.
    It’s hard to make slang flow naturally, but you did an amazing job with that. After I get up and sufficiently “coffeed” I’m sharing this all over the internet. You’re the tops! Hugs.

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    1. I’m glad you enjoyed it, Teagan. I wanted to feature Skippy in a post outside of the bar during JusJoJan. When you gave us the “24” prompt, I thought of him and Lulu. Your dictionary really helped. “Penultimate” wasn’t the easiest word to work with, but I like how it came together.

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      1. I meant to mention that gorgeous header photo. It’s downright mesmerizing.

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        1. Thanks. I am liking this header image thing. That was taken during a tour of the Warner Theater in Waterbury. They opened the curtains so we could see what it felt like to be on stage.

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  7. I think Skippy is going to posilutely nail his role! And a star is born…

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    1. Haha! This could be his big break, Lois.

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  8. Wow. Just look at Skippy getting his freak on. Great job with the prompt.

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    1. Ha! Thanks Cheryl. I wanted to get Skippy out from behind the bar during JusJoJan.

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  9. That was great fun!

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    1. I’m glad you enjoyed it :-)

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  10. Great response to the prompt, Dan. Loved the Skippy and Lulu tie in. Thanks to Teagan for the inspiration.

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    1. Many thanks for visiting, John. Hugs.

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    2. Thanks John. I always shudder a bit thinking about a writing challenge, but this worked well.

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  11. That was fun and a great collab tying in Teagan’s Flapper slang.

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    1. I’m glad you enjoyed this little scene, Deborah.

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  12. Well done, and it’s perfect for the celebrative season!

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    1. Thanks Gwen. This was fun.

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  13. Nicely played 1920s slang!

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    1. Thanks Liz. Teagan’s book made that much easier.

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      1. You’re welcome, Dan. I could tell.

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  14. Skippy and Lulu- that was a great post on the prompt!

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    1. Thanks Jennie. I’m glad you enjoyed it.

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      1. You’re welcome, Dan.

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  15. Glad rags–my daughters love that expression. (K)

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    1. I think it’s a pretty good expression.

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  16. […] First, a big thank you to Dan Antion for making a post of the writing exercise I did on Wednesday — and giving my books a double shout-out, with Speak Falpper and Hullabal Lulu, a Diesel-Punk Adventure.  Don’t miss Dan’s post. […]

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  17. […] “Speaking of joy, Cheryl, did you hear how Skippy did last night? I heard he filled in for the star of that play.” […]

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  18. Ha! I’m hooked. I want to hear the rest of the story!!!

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    1. I’m glad. Perhaps there will be more.

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  19. Fabulous, Dan. A great use of Teagan’s dictionary and it is always fun to hear about Lulu’s adventures. I’m sure this is not the last we here of her and her adventures. Have a great year 2024!

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    1. Thanks Olga. I think Skippy might meet up with Lulu again, at least in his dreams. I hope you have a great year!

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  20. I’m so glad to see Skippy evolving! This was fun — applause to Teagan!

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    1. These are the things I could never have predicted. Happy New Year, Skippy!

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  21. Bravo, Dan, a great piece and I loved the inclusion of Lulu.

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    1. Thanks Robbie. It’s amazing how these characters take over.

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  22. Skippy got a part! 23 Skiddoo, kiddo!

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    1. Haha – That would have been a great ending line. I think we might see more of Skippy this year, outside of the bar.

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