Welcome to November. David and I are celebrating the arrival of the eleventh month of the year, well, just like we celebrate the arrival of every Saturday—a little bit of beverage, maybe some food and some discussion. With any luck we’ll manage to work in the Stream of Consciousness Saturday prompt Linda gave us.

Stream of Consciousness Saturday by Linda G. Hill

That should be easy.

“What’s with the candy, Curley?”

“It’s leftover from last night, David. If I leave it home, I’ll eat it.”

“Aren’t you worried about us filling up on chocolate and not ordering food?”

“If you eat that much, I’ll charge you for it. Have you seen the price of candy lately? Pizza is cheaper.”

“We’ll see what Dan says when he gets here.”

“Here he comes now.”

“You’re late.”

“I’m not late. In fact, I’m five minutes early. How long have you been here.”

“A John Howell’s Special, three cherries, two Snickers and a Reese’s ghost.”

“Ghost?”

“Curley has bags of peanut butter Halloween shapes.”

“Does he have a glass of Modelo?”

“I do, Dan. Nice and cold. Here’s the Specials menu, in case you guys are tired of pizza and stuffed mushrooms.”

“Like that could happen.”

“I don’t know, Dan. They have a couple of burgers on here that look pretty good.”

“I had a burger yesterday.”

“You came here without me?”

“No. I had to run up to Woodcraft.”

“And you stopped that the White Hut.”

“I did.”

“What’d you have?”

“A double cheeseburger and a mixed basket.”

“Mixed basket of what?”

“It’s a half-order of French fries and a half-order of onion rings.”

“That sounds pretty good. Did you wash that down with a beer, Dan?”

“They don’t have a liquor license.”

“So…?”

“Cream Soda.”

“I don’t think I’ve had a Cream Soda since I was eight years old.”

“I don’t drink soda very often. This was kind of a treat.”

“So, what are you up to now that November has landed?”

“Pretty much the same things I was doing in October, David. A little writing, a little woodworking and necessary yard work.”

“How’s that new book coming?”

“It’s not.”

“No time to write?”

“I have time, but I don’t like it.”

“Why not?”

“It’s boring.”

“How boring? Can’t you punch it up?”

“Remember the ‘I know’ part of ‘Ain’t No Sunshine’ by Bill Withers?”

“Whoa. That boring?”

“Yes.”

“Well, if you don’t like your book, please don’t put it out there for me to read. Can you rework it?”

“Yeah, there just isn’t enough action for a novel.”

“So, a novella? That’s shorter, right?”

“Maybe a novelette. Maybe something shorter.”

“How about a pamphlet? Greeting card companies are always looking for input.”

“Thanks for the encouragement, David. Someone else might have said something sappy like, ‘don’t worry, you’ll figure it out.’ Glad I can count on you.”

“What about a story about two guys who meet up at a bar, and…”

“Did you read Poetic Justice? I gave you a copy.”

“Yes. I read it because you said a character was inspired by me.”

“Yes, Wilson Barcroft — he was inspired by you.”

“But you killed him in the first paragraph!

“Yes, but his spirit lives on throughout the story.”

“Halloween was yesterday. I prefer living on in corporeal form.”

“Remember what Mick Jagger said.”

“Dan, Mick Jagger is something like two hundred years old, he said a lot of things.”

“I was referring to: ‘You can’t always get what you want.’ And I think he’s eighty-two years old.”

“Eighty-two? That’s almost my age. Maybe you could write a story about an aging rock musician…”

“It’s been done.”

“Hell, Dan, everything’s been done. It’s all just variations on a theme at this point.”

“I like to think we introduce new things.”

“We? Is that the Royal We? Getting kind of fancy, aren’t you?”

“I was referring to the indie authors I follow. If their books are variations on a theme, they’re darn good ones.”

“So, what are you going to write?”

“I’m working on a new Rascal Todd mystery.”

“When will you release that?”

“Not until this time next year, David. Don’t rush me.”

“You guys want another round?”

“We do, Curley.”

“And speaking of variations on a theme, maybe you guys would like to try our Hawaiian Pizza. It comes with Canadian bacon and pineapple chunks.”

“Dan, how about a story where Rascal Todd hears about a murdered bartender and is worried that the victim was her boyfriend.”

“Easy, David. One meat-lovers pizza coming up.”

And, if you want to know more about Wilson Barcroft…

76 responses to “Not Every Story Works — SoCS”

  1. Good luck with the WIP. We’ve all been there. About three chapters into my latest book I almost scrapped it because I thought it was too boring. But after talking to my critique partners and rethinking it, it finally came together. You’re in good company. (see what I did there) Happy Saturday!

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    1. Thanks Darlene. I’ve called in the troops on this one, and I do think there’s a way forward, but I’m going to let it rest for a while. Ultimately I think it’s good we’re so hard on ourselves.

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    2. I forgot to mention that I like the way you snuck in the prompt ;-)

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  2. Good Morning Dan. I guess if you put the rogue WIP down and leave it to ponder itself it might surprise you?

    I have the oposite problem I have characters and situations screaming at me to sort them out but I just can’t carve out the time to do them justice….poetic or any sort!

    I love all the photos today the food and drinks at the top and the wonderful autumnal one too. My favourite ones apart from the critters (painted and real) are the birds gathering on the telegraph wires and the sun rise at the Veterans park. Stunning. Have a good weekend 😁💜💜

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    1. Thanks Willow. Characters can be unrelenting taskmasters once you set them free. I know we will both get beyond these trouble spots. I guess it’s just part of the process.

      I’m glad you like the birds on the wire. I loved how they filled that space.

      I hope you have a great weekend.

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      1. My characters are very pushy! You are right we will both get there in the end ! 💜

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        1. Yeah, I’m wondering if Rascal and company decided to push me away from a story that didn’t feature them ;-)

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          1. you know Dan that’s quite possible.. perhaps they want you to weave them in? 💜

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            1. Yeah, but the story I was working on started before Rascal was born. I thought I could weave her into a sequel, but… Then again, maybe I’ll write the sequel, and weave the original story in as a flashback. Who knows? There are many ways to go, but for now, it sits in the corner.

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            2. I get that Dan…. They are like my characters…in the corner sulking 💜💜💜

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  3. Some lovely autumnal scenes

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    1. I’m glad you like them, Sheree!

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  4. There’s no rush with another book, Dan. You’ve got to enjoy the process, right? I’m a bit like that with blogging. There are times I can’t be bothered but I miss it a day later. I enjoyed your dialogue. Happy All Saints Day xx

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    1. Thanks Jo. It’s true, you have to enjoy it. I do miss it, but when I don’t enjoy it, it’s time to give it a rest. Happy All Saints Day to you, too!

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  5. Glad to hear there is anoth3er book in the works. That was quite a storm we had.

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    1. Thanks Sherry. We’re still caught in some very strong wind, but the rain ended.

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  6. That burl is a perfect squirrel home.
    Hope you didn’t startle Mr.Buns away from his dinner.
    And now?
    I want a cream soda.
    😉

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    1. I love it when the squirrels pop in and out of that hole. I know it means the tree is doomed, but I glad for every winter they get to call it home.

      I startled Mr Bun, but I told him I only needed a couple pictures for River. The second one will be posted tomorrow.

      The Cream Soda was delicious.

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  7. Writing: curse and blessing. No problem with plot or character in this week’s visit to the bar, however. Some good snark to start the month. Your photos are great, especially the featured photo — that’s a gorgeous painting of autumn!

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    1. It’s a good thing I enjoy writing, Maureen. Otherwise, the frustration would drive me crazy. Visiting the bar is a good way to work through these issues. I’m glad you like the pictures. Most of the leaves are gone now, after two days of strong winds. I hope you have a greta weekend.

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  8. The dialogue about the pamphlet is hilarious! Well done, Dan. I am not sure it is a compliment to suggest a published author reduce his next novel to a pamphlet…oh my!

    I love your gallery of photos. The Colt Dome through the trees is a beautiful composition…just perfect.
    So cute the bunny does not move as you sneak up on him/her…adorable. I love the scenes of the grey squirrel on the way into his/her home, great captures. Perhaps he or she was looking out expectantly for a peanut or two?

    Fall colors are coming in quickly it seems. I love the contrast of the colors in the row of oak trees, some in different stages of color changes.

    My favorite photos are: The sunrise over Veterans’ Park
    and the sunlight rays beautifully captured, and *the photo of the storm from your vantage point…love the drama you captured. What a great opening scene for a book…as you alluded to in your caption.

    I hope you have a wonderful weekend, Dan. Thank you for the photos and the laughs the exchange of wit between David and you. Cheers.

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  9. Great fall photos. I have a printed manuscript that is a functional door stop. Could never get it to work. Sometimes there is that situation. Of course, on mine I worked on it until it was 120,000 words. Now it gives me peace that it has a purpose.

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    1. Thanks for sharing that, John. I stopped after 25,000 words. I like the ending I have in mind, but it needs to come very soon.

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  10. Thanks Suzette. I’m glad you enjoy these bar visits.

    The squirrels pop out of that hole expecting a delivery. I won’t toss peanuts in the park, or on the grounds of the apartments, but this little forest seems like an ok spot for a quick delivery. I always put a few peanuts at the base of the tree.

    I walked past those oak trees today, and most of the leaves are gone. Two days of high winds and two inches of rain took their toll.

    That storm photo is from our front door. I wish I could have captured the howling wind. I hope you have a great weekend.

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    1. A delivery..!” You are most kind to deliver to the critters at their treehouse, Dan!

      The winds were here a few weeks ago with a similar impact to the autumn leaves. It is that time of year for the Westerlies to make their rounds, I suspect.. And, I would think twice (or more) about venturing out to do any photography in such weather; much respect to you Dan …that was a great capture!

      Thanks, Dan. Cheers.

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      1. I went for a short walk today. It was too windy to go too far, or on any of the streets where debris might be flying.

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        1. Very wise indeed. Stay safe, Dan. Cheers.

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  11. Dan, your featured photo is just gorgeous. Autumn at its best.
    Today’s dialogue was a hoot and a half! Especially the “pamphlet”!

    Smokey going home, hopefully with a peanut stuffed in his mouth, is adorable.

    The birds on the lines…where’s Alfred Hitchcock when you need him?

    The flag display is always a treat to see with Old Glory proudly above the other flags.

    Enjoy a relaxing weekend with your bride. The leaves will wait for you to bag them. Happy November!

    ginger🦋

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    1. Thanks Ginger.

      Nobody goes home with empty paws. One Smokey and one gray squirrel (we call all of them Sammy) have learned how to carry two peanuts. We refer to them as ‘Twofer’ and they are quite calm about coming right up to us to beg.

      We see the birds swarming in and out of the yard when we feed them, and I always think about that movie. In the late 1970s, I spent a night in Bodega Bay where that movie was filmed. My ex-wife wasn’t at all happy when I told her that fact.

      It’s too windy to try and capture the leaves today. Maybe they’ll blow into the neighbor’s yard ;-)

      I hope you have a great weekend.

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  12. Dan, I always feel bad about it whenever I put a story aside, no matter what the reason. But it’s never wasted effort, because it’s also practice. Also, like I said, you never know what the story might morph into while it sets. Have fun with the new Rascal story. 😁 You don’t have to use a schedule. 😎 Hugs.

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    1. Thanks Teagan. I bow to your wisdom in these matters. I gave up schedules and deadlines the minute I retired. I had lunch with a friend at work yesterday. It reminded me that I miss the people, but I don’t miss the job. I don’t want writing to feel like a job. This story can sit and pull itself together. For all I know, the Rascal Todd character group sabotaged that effort so I’d get back to them ;-)

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      1. And as it sets, like a gourmet food, all the ideas and nuances and “flavors” develop, meld, and solidify. ;) Now I need lunch…

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  13. Wishing you good writing mojo on the next novel, Dan!

    The burger, onion rings and cream soda are making me hungry, although I rarely eat or drink any of those things. Loved cream soda when I was younger. And, good choice staying away from the pineapple pizza.

    Looks like autumn is in full force in New England. Maybe past prime, but just like here, there’s still plenty of color to enjoy. Happy Saturday!

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    1. Thanks Mary!

      I don’t eat like that very often, and I rarely have soda of any sort, but fountain drinks were the preferred option and I spied the cream soda – I couldn’t resist.

      Most of the leaves blew away in the storm and the leftover winds.

      Have a great weekend.

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  14. You had me at cream soda…..

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    1. Haha – it brought back so many memories.

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  15. “How about a pamphlet?”–that made me laugh! Good old David…

    Our local grocery store carries IBC soda and I have had such a craving for root beer, which I cannot even remember the last time I had a root beer soda. Then as I was standing at the checkout, guy in front of me was also buying root beer and then mentioned IBC black cherry… A 4-pack of both sits in my pantry. Tiny sips at a time because, boy, are they sweet! And that is saying a lot with my sweet tooth. Cream soda…added to the list.

    The squirrel going home is so cute. And then he turns to look and make sure you snapped his picture–adorable!

    We are in the high 40’s down here so you must be cold in CT. Stay warm, Dan. Happy November!

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    1. I visit a local diner about once a month, and I sometimes have ginger ale and sometimes root beer. This was the first time I’ve seen cream soda in ages. It was so good, but it was so sweet, I couldn’t finish it.

      I think that squirrel turned around and popped out to make sure I tossed some peanuts at the base of the tree. I’m door dash for her.

      We’ve been in the low 30s overnight, but still close to 60 during the day.

      Enjoy the weekend!

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  16. Oooo, that dark and stormy picture would make a great book cover…. If you set aside that WIP that’s boring you now, be sure to keep it where you can look at it occasionally; one of my books happened when I thought of two go-nowhere ideas being part of the same story.

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    1. Thanks! I still have it accessible and I am keeping my notes page, character details, etc. I think it will see the light of day at some point. Right now, I’m stubbornly stuck on the original idea. It could be reworked a thousand ways, but none appeal to me today.

      I do like the dark and stormy photo.

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  17. A lovely entertaining conversation Dan. I boihh go t the Reeces shapes. Not one trick or treater can down our street. I think I drop them off at the gym. Have a lovely day. 🍁😊🍂

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    1. Sorry for the keyboard glitch. “ I bought”

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      1. I’ve gotten good at deciphering those 😏

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    2. That’s funny, dropping then at the gym. Have a nice weekend.

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  18. I’ll have one of those John Howell special deal with extra cherries!

    Fab pics Dan, and happy writing!

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    1. Thanks Resa. One John Howell’s Special coming up. Extra cherries 🍒🍒

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  19. Yep, when I’m writing and I’m boring myself, I know I’m in big trouble!

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  20. Great capture of that squirrel!

    When I do some art I don’t like I can always repurpose it. Poetry can always give you some good lines to use somewhere else. I’ve never tried a novel, so I’m not sure how to recycle it. But I do know that feeling when it’s time to move on.

    Pizza is always good food for thought…(K)

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    1. Anonymous is me. I forgot to log in–so annoying but I should be used to it by now.

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    2. I do that with woodworking. I’ll find a place for this story. I think.

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  21. I love the ‘squirrel going home’ sequence.

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    1. That squirrel is adorable.

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    1. Thanks. I think we’re mostly done.

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  22. Some stories require rework. That’s a writing fact. I edited two short stories and wrote a balled this morning so I’m pretty happy.

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    1. I always do a lot of rework and editing. In doing so, I end up rereading a lot of what I’ve written. When rereading this, I realized that it felt like work, I wasn’t enjoying the story. I think it’s good to put it aside for a while.

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  23. I added the audio version of Poetic Justice to my library. 1 1/2 books in front of it 💝

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    1. Thank you! I hope you enjoy it.

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  24. Good morning and I’m still laughing about “the pamphlet “ love it😅

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    1. Thanks – glad I could make you laugh.

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  25. Love the promo video about Barcroft. I’m sure the story you’re not happy with will shake out and you’ll feel better about the new direction it will take.

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    1. Thanks! Ideas get shelved, but they have a way of returning. I think this one will.

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  26. Great use of the prompt, Dan. I had to laugh about the greeting card or pamphlet remark. Don’t worry, the story will shake itself out and you’ll be sailing on! Love the autumn photos!

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    1. Thanks Jan. These things happen. It will sit for a while, but I’m sure it will turn into something.

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  27. Great bar banter, Dan! I love your photos, but the birds are a bit creepy, like the movie The Birds. Perfect for Halloween though.

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